this feels like a poem written by an angry bitter Hobbit or garden gnome. Sick vibes. I love dragons they wild although. I might not like this dragon cuz it's a meanie to the hobbit gnome. Yo wait. Are there three dragons?! Yoo that's lore

I felt an anger and resentment in this poem, and I liked how it showed a wounded sort of energy that decides to fight back. To me, it just seems a bit bare and surface-level, I think you could go deeper into the metaphors you’re using. I wasn’t a big fan of the repeating line & same rhyme scheme for each line, it kind of feels like the poem started but didn’t really go anywhere. I think if you open yourself up to more options and lower limitations on rhyme scheme, you could really get the words to flow and have some deeper ideas showing!


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Dragons, dragons, dragons