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Your first line is amazing!  Shaves off my heart in little peelings.  You did well to portray the desperation in this piece.  Nice work.

That means you got those rhymes! Good job! 🙂

Wait this got a 10/10 from you? I made this in 10 minutes cause I was bored, this is mid tier work from me.

The flow is playful but longing. I love how each part rhymes locally with its part making each part feel like it is own poem. You could separate these parts and they could all be their own Coffee Poetry piece and it would fit so nicely. 

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It was a hellova feeling. I love it! 10/10.


I feel my feelings 
It shaves off my heart in little peelings 
I love the idea of you and me 
But I know that’s something I’ll never see 

You’re a figment of my imagination 
I can’t decide if I want you to be real 
Locked my heart away
For you to steal 

Hidden away in a box of my design
Gave you the key and watched you throw it away 
I loved watching you betray me 
Steal my breath and leave me with nothing to say 

Be my baby 
I know you won’t 
But I still want you 
As my lady 

Or maybe I’ll see you as my man tomorrow 
My dreams leave me feeling sorrow 
But I’m ecstatic when you cross my mind 
The imaginary I will one day find

[Uno](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/mlb2g1/i_killed_myself_today/ivveqna/?utm_source=share&amp;utm_medium=ios_app&amp;utm_name=iossmf&amp;context=3)

[Dos](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/jqbva0/i_think_ive_lost_the_poet_in_me/ivvfccz/?utm_source=share&amp;utm_medium=ios_app&amp;utm_name=iossmf&amp;context=3)

Phantom Love