i think the format could be better but it’s hard on mobile

ah okay, i’m very new to poems so probably my fault so thanks :)

Please don’t take anything of what I’m about to say offensive. Please. But I’m having difficulty automatically understanding what you’re trying to say here. It’s also hard to read for me. Why is that? I’m asking myself. Maybe there is something wrong with me. But I found your poem very hard to understand. But I point the finger at myself. Most likely I am to blame. But clearly there is something here, like an energy. I can feel it. And I admire that about this poem. Take care. Stay safe.


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I really like this piece! I think you could make some improvements on how it flows, but over all I really dig it. To me, it sort of describes my depression.

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