One thing I love to remember poetry by is as a way to express how u feel without being so specific. Also keep writing you’ll def get better and I’m glad u shared this with the community :)

I like the bluntness and the way it flows. You use some creative rhyming and I can definitely relate to it to a certain extent, especially the feeling of apathy and emptiness. The ending, to me, feels quite abrupt like there was no real conclusion, but that's just me. Its good nonetheless! Keep it up!


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What to do today,

It’s such a big question.

How to spend my day?

Find a task and do it until completion.

What’s the point,

My time is coming soon regardless,

Put myself at gunpoint 

Who’s gonna clean up the mess .

Everyday feels the same,

Wishing I had more time.

Everything feels so Lame 

Maybe I should write some rhymes.

I sit here and contemplate.

Thinking about my own fate, 
with so much hate.

I’m new to poetry, sorry if format is wrong or anything. I figured I may be able to use this as an outlet for some of my thoughts and feelings.

Feedback:

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/z7jzky/a_night_walk/?utm_source=share&amp;utm_medium=ios_app&amp;utm_name=iossmf

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/z7ha7l/am_i_to_you_what_you_are_to_me/?utm_source=share&amp;utm_medium=ios_app&amp;utm_name=iossmf

What to do with my final days