Trying

Two men trying their best

  to determine how to demolish a deck,

  while I stand opposite them

  watching what must be a hundred Geese flying along

  the river-bed, towards an early winter's

  sunset, trying my best to determine

  why I couldn't care less

  about how to demolish

  a deck.

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