I am very new to writing. I am taking a creative writing class this semester and I have found my class to all be very supportive and kind. Which is lovely, but not really all that helpful. I write primarily because I enjoy it, but I also want my writer to be rich, entertaining, and good. I'm open to being crushed and devastated, if it will help my writing.
We are working on flash fiction at the moment, so this is an adapted version of a short story I have been working with for a while.
Any critics are welcome, of course. But, I'm especially curious if its a little too on the nose and obvious to be entertaining? I wasn't necessarily going for a big shock twist, but I did want some eerie