[2576] The disappearance of Timothy Sherwood (fantasy + detective)

Hi all, this is the start to the second short story in an anthology I'm writing about two policemen in a fantasy setting of early 20th century England that is plagued by monsters.

The story is 12k words. Any kind of feedback is welcome, but I'm worried that the story/pacing is too slow right now, and would like to hear your impression on this.

my story

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