[2608] An Inheritance for the Meek (part 2/2)

EDIT: Thank you to everyone who posted a critique! I have enough feedback to begin rewriting.

Hello, thank you in advance for your critique!

This is the second half of my short story. I recommend reading the first half of the story here if you aren't familiar with it.

All comments are welcome, especially considering the following:

• What do you think of the pacing of the second half? Does the tension rise at a satisfactory rate?
• What do you think of the characters, particularly the protagonist?
• Did you find the action sequences interesting?
• Did you have any questions about the story, world, or characters that you feel were not satisfactorily addressed?

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An Inheritance for the Meek, Part 2

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