[964] Segment from short story

I have not written a lot before and I thought, "what better way to start my journey than having strangers shitting on me?'. Seriously though, I'm a beginner and I'd like to know what are my absolute worse weaknesses when it comes to writing while I'm still a blank canvas, so I can work on them first.

The prompt is "zombie apocalypse" and the MC is indeed that overplayed Big Snarky Mysterious Edgy guy because I figured that would be pretty simple to start out with. The segment doesn't have much dialogue and it's more introspective I think.

My main concerns are with my prose and descriptions but pointing out any blind spots that catch your attention is extremely helpful. Thank you!

edit: I know next to nothing about AR-50's and axes. I will be doing my proper research on these instead of just throwing names of weapons next time, lol

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