[1613] MULTIPLIER: Chapter 1

Heyooo!

This is the 1st chapter of my MS, which I've been working on for 2 years. I've been told by many that my 1st chapter needs work, and I've done my best to fix its issues, but I'm still uncertain. So, here I am, asking you all to please rip my WIP to shreds.

CONTEXT: This is a YA Sci-Fi story, with almost 100k words in total.

WHAT I WANT TO KNOW:

• How you think the rest of the story will be like, from reading this chapter.
• Whether there's too much info-dumping.
• Your general thoughts on the MC.
• How I can make my 1st chapter even more intriguing.

LINK: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1cGIJpPpG6BW1iB7z6U-EpB_7zIcz9zABTWJqGTBebsI/edit?usp=sharing

MY CRITIQUE [1745 words]: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/10jzwai/1745_dark_eyes/

Thanks in advance! Happy destroying!