Untitled Goat Book - Chapter 1 [1950]

Hail, Destructive Readers.
This is my first post. I believe I understand the rules. Please correct me if I have mistaken anything.

My submission is the first chapter of a story I've been working on. The story as a whole is still a work in progress, but I'm happy with the first few chapters. Please, destroy them.

Thank you for your time.
Regards

Stu x

Chapter 1 (Read Only)

Chapter 1 (Comments)

My Critique.

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