[1755] Darling Killer

Hello! This is a half-completed story I've gotten back into, changing up the framework of the narrative by having my protag tell her story to a detective rather than writing the events in a more linear fashion. Does this work for the reader in terms of creating a sense of tension and suspense? I'm sure there's also a million problems besides that, so please destroy me. Thanks!

Critique Goat Book, 1950

Darling Doc 1795