[1529] Bad Influences

[1529] Bad Influences

Hey! This is the first few pagss of a YA novel I hope to query. Please tear it to shreds for me; all critiques are greatly appreciated.

Link to doc: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1J6ormYfouVpsQw2wNsgIbYNWAGQYuXuyOtoRALY1ipw/edit

Previous critique: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/113was1/the_rites_of_pain_v2_first_ten_pages_2918/j8u9vx3/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=iossmf&context=3

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/113vuw6/1077_ill_carry_you_in_buckets/j8tco6z/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=iossmf&context=3