Hey everyone,

I revisted my 1st draft from a while ago and edited the first chapter. The draft got pretty long, so I wonder whether this chapter seems like an interesting start to a story.

Let me know all about the good, bad, and ugly!

&amp;#x200B;

Story: [Chapter 1: The Extraction](https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Df-n22l8zINQOlmRnRFWRNA1kxT8lKprlo2Q8Zc4ysU/edit?usp=sharing)

&amp;#x200B;

Crtis:

[\[1462\] One Little Ship](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/11e9mzl/comment/jagx8k5/?utm_source=share&amp;utm_medium=web2x&amp;context=3)

[\[956\] The General](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/112hkfz/comment/j8qkmkt/?utm_source=share&amp;utm_medium=web2x&amp;context=3)

[\[1990\] The Lake](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/112hk35/comment/j8oi3lb/?utm_source=share&amp;utm_medium=web2x&amp;context=3)

[\[1814\] Root of the Tree](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/112yk8l/comment/j8oabkj/?utm_source=share&amp;utm_medium=web2x&amp;context=3)

Edit: Since I was near leaching, went ahead and went into far more detail for one of my crits

more detailed crit; [\[1462\] One Little Ship](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/11e9mzl/comment/jajzbtu/?utm_source=share&amp;utm_medium=web2x&amp;context=3)

[3697] Chapter 1: The Extraction