[2558] Port Umbra — YA Fantasy (Short Story)
Your boy got his rejection letter for this piece today. The editors were honestly very kind about it. The major criticism was that it didn't hold their attention and presented more questions than it solved. And while that does help to point me in the right direction, I'd love more in-depth feedback to turn this story into its best self.
The full length of this piece is around 5500 words, but I chopped off the last six or so pages to better fit the spirit of this sub. I figure if it already has issues half-way in, the next few pages won't save it anyway.
So, if you happen to like it, great! There's more where that came from (Beta-swap? Nej, forbid it. ...unless?). And if not, well, I guess I'm closer to figuring out what it needs to improve.
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Posted Mar 20, 2023, 5:52 PM UTC