[895] Gronk's History of Fire -- Literary Fiction

This is a somewhat self contained section of a longer piece I'm working on. I'm interested in any thoughts about this piece at all. At a general level: Do you like it? What parts make you roll your eyes? Do you think parts of it are funny? Do you think parts of it are interesting? Does it make you wonder what happens next? If so, what questions would you like to have answered? What do you think of the sentence composition? What parts (specifically) make you think, "yeah this was written by an amateur" ? And then the usual character, setting, and plot stuff.

I'm coming off of reading some Thomas Pynchon, George Saunders, Helen Oyeyemi, and Don DeLillo, Aimee Bender, so I also wonder if this reads like it's in that tradition and in what ways it misses the mark.

Thanks for taking a look.

[piece](https://docs.google.com/document/d/1szoG13c6YfZ4gjAVgxMC-_-rOEBEj4VEAsh-YCP5dyQ/edit?usp=sharing)

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