[1831] Never Have I Ever

Hello, this is an excerpt of a story I'm writing. Note that there is no hook and the ending is abrupt - it's cut out from the middle of a chapter. Also, I cut some of the setting description for word count purposes.

In particular, I'm interested in how effectively I've conveyed the characterization and the dynamics between the characters.

• Is the narrator sympathetic?

• Do you get a sense of the personalities of the three girls?

• Do you get a sense of their feelings about each other?

General feedback is also welcome.

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