[1678] MULTIPLIER - Chapter 1

Hello, all!

I tried to upload this before, but turns out, the criticism I gave was sloppy. Sorry. My bad, guys. I've done my best to fix it, so I should be able to post this.... I hope.

Anyway, this is the first chapter of my WIP. It's a YA Sci-Fi.

I'm at the point in my WIP where I can't afford to make any big changes, so please try to refrain from telling me to rewrite my entire chapter. (I know this makes me sound kinda whiny, but damn, writing a novel is hard.)

All I wanna know is: Does my first chapter "work" as a first chapter? After you've finished reading it, can you get a sense that the rest of my story is polished, or at least decent enough?

That's it, really.

Here's the short blurb of my story, in case you're interested:

When a strange dog destroys a building, Creek City’s infamous 16 year-old vigilante Multiplier is asked to investigate it. Little does she know, one strange dog is the least of her problems.

The trails lead her to her past. The past she’s spent years trying to forget.

Multiplier can run away, like before. She can start over in a new city, with a new identity, leading a new life.

But her past will always find her again. And it will always try to drag her back into a life of torture.

Unless, she stops running and fight back.

Or die trying.

Story: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1K63IdD90oB5EIpFW-yX5ICkYMkqCNIQhef7CtyAXOQ8/edit?usp=sharing

Proof of payment [2139]: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/12psp3y/2139_the_wind_farmers_daughter/

Happy destroying, fellas!