The sea, the river, a flower.
Is this love?
Is it true
that I have it inside me?
If you're near,
send me a sign,
a butterfly
that's not a poem.
Appear out of me,
keep me company,
offer me
more than death.
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Posted May 2, 2023, 4:30 PM UTC
I really enjoy this. It feels like the narrator is looking to the beauty of nature for a sign from God or spiritual experience. I identify with that because I often do that myself while on walks. Good work. Thanks for sharing.
Yeah, that's exactly what I was trying to portray. Thank you for replying.
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I really enjoy this. It feels like the narrator is looking to the beauty of nature for a sign from God or spiritual experience. I identify with that because I often do that myself while on walks. Good work. Thanks for sharing.
After reading this I feel the need to indulge in nature and parallel that with religion. Not all spiritual enlightenment takes place in a pew or behind stained glass. Sometimes what we need is a natural earthly awakening to coexist with our religious upbringing.
Thank you for sharing. I truly enjoyed it.
I am glad, thank you for your words