Maganti Steel (fight scene excerpt) [1144]

Warning: Gore and attempted sexual assault

Context: Darielle is a daemon homunculus. A girl (18) who doesn't know what she is and is the spoiled daughter of a nobleman. She is a bit of a sword nut so she can fight (kind of). She and her bodyguard (Damian) are negotiating things inside the private office of a powerful merchant on the sixth floor of a guild hall. Things go awry when they are ambushed by powerful witch hunters. Pretty much everyone in this fight is a superhuman so realism goes out the window a bit. Please let me know if this scene is easy to understand and what parts are and are not engaging. Thanks.

Link:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1sAoiTfzK01KHvgw75v3WhFkSKoRLLLK0f1ajybjSfrU/edit

Offering to the Gods: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/139oprh/1210_possession_prologue/

Thanks to everyone taking the time to read / review my work!