[2709] Promises and Progress

Writing a bunch of story starts right now to work on promises and delivering intrigue. I have thoughts on what this story is supposed to deliver, but I'd like to know if it worked or not. What do you think was promised in the story? Would you keep reading and why?

My Story

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Note: I deleted my previous post which used the same word bank due to nonresponse. Lmk if that's not okay.