[1353] What Burned, What Might Be Left Untouched
Hello RDR,
Long time no see. I've got one that I've been putting a lot of work on for a little blog that i've been writing, but I have been so invested in it that I think I may be writing myself into nonsense. It's a bit of a mess, as it's part amalgamation of three or four separate drafts spanning at least two years. Most of it is true.
[1353] What Burned, What Might Be Left Untouched
I'm hoping to get some feedback on the clarity as the piece jumps around a lot, has a lot of non-sequiturs, and is overall pretty inconsistent in POV. I think there's a compelling story to be told, but 1) better understanding where that lies & understanding how to portray it and 2) getting some technical feedback on my stylistic nonsense would probably go a long way.
As always, all comments are appreciated. I hope that you enjoy.
P.S. any thoughts on the title? Also considering just, "What Burned, What Might Be Left", but I am open to suggestions.
Critiques:
[2133] Underworld Mechanization
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Posted Jun 14, 2023, 3:34 AM UTC