[470] Soulbound

Hi all!

I'm really struggling with the opening section of my YA Contemporary fantasy. The good people over at r/pubtips savaged it as not compelling enough, and I've been tearing my hair out rewriting. Please let me know if you would keep reading! Criticism of my grammar is probably deserved and gratefully received!

Here it is!

[Previous critique on 729 words] (https://old.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/14b6ibu/729_touching_the_unknown_chapter_01/johk7hx/)