[1,464] The Edge of the Aunnan
This piece of writing is the start of one of my billion attempts at a chapter one for my fantasy novel. I left comments on, and I would greatly appreciate your thoughts on it.
It's intended to be a fantasy novel with psychological and horror elements gradually increasing. Its by no means intended to be anything grimdark though, and I suppose my aim is something like a fairytale/mythological mood, especially later on. The title is for the chapter, not the book.
My primary objective with this chapter was to introduce hopefully compelling mysteries and foreshadow future events. I think(?) my characters are kind of weird and not always relatable, but I want them to be compelling nonetheless.
My questions:
- Is anything introduced in this chapter too vague or confusing? Do you think there is anything that either needs less or more explanation?
- Do I meander a bit too much during the narrative?
- Did it manage to catch your interest? If it lost your interest, then at which point did it happen?
- Based on what you read, where do you think the story is going?
I'm also still working on my grammar and prose. I'd really appreciate any advice you have on this.
My contributions to the sub:
[2133] Underworld Mechanization
[1970] Sophia and the Colour Weavers
Posted Jun 18, 2023, 9:22 PM UTC · edited