[2560] Sophron

Hey guys, first post here.

So the first chapter of my novel is kicking my tail. The rest of the manuscript, I love. But I’ve reworked this intro so many times, I can’t even see it anymore, and I still hate it. Can y’all tear it apart for me, please?

Thank you!!

…Guess I’ll add a content warning for institutional abuse/drugs. Just in case.

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