[2488] Chapter 1 (Part 1 of 2) - The Wishful Boy

Hello! This is the first 1/2 of the first chapter of my YA Science Fantasy. I'd appreciate feedback on anything and everything! Given that this is YA, thoughts on characters would be super great. Feel free to be critical!

Fun fact: I'm not sure if anyone remembers but this is actually part of the same WIP as the Chaiwala chapter (Kian and Avani are alternating POVs).

Chapter link (view only): https://docs.google.com/document/d/1HrEtBMrn42NAZTATQE51NQUb7awf33mjBUi37KjKJYA/edit?usp=sharing

Chapter link (comments): https://docs.google.com/document/d/1phHDc2RwWMi70QkFAoV_8q2T6IEcMuRGqOVxoEOQHs0/edit?usp=sharing

Critiques:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/14m81wx/2560_sophron/jqayara/?context=3 (using the 2560 words completely)