[1469] LotGT - Chapter 1 (PART 1, V2)

Crits: 732 - Asher, part 1 + 919 - Thank You for Reading

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Hey there, after reviewing feedback, this is the next iteration of Chapter 1. Things that have changed:

Boy has a name.

Captain's dialogue has (hopefully) been homogenized.

Slight adjustments/ changes .

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I like this iteration better so thanks for all previous feedback (I've been applying it to following parts too :D)

Orange Highlight = things I was feeling to omit.

Yellow Highlight = things I was feeling like wording differently.

Opinions on those are welcome too!

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