[2846] Chapter one of my fantasy story

Hi there. This is the first chapter in my fantasy story and is not from the perspective of the main character (though you can probably guess which character is). I'd be grateful for any feedback, but would appreciate any notes specifically regarding pacing and if it works as an effective hook.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Q2bbs8Tm3YhHED7LRudPwfeQfM8xYSq6zC9DM0wpRwk/edit?usp=sharing

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