[2477] Lacrimosa

Okay, third times a charm! This is the 2nd chapter of the book, but it's the first chapter for the POV character. I want your honest critiques so have at it!
I'd like some feedback on a couple things:

Prose - Yay or nay?
Characters - How did you feel about them?
Plot/Setting - Was it immersive in any sense?
Dialogue - How did you find it?
Pacing, conflict and tension - Was there any of the three and how was it?
Most importantly - Would you read on?

Story: Link to Story

Critique: [2491] A Bitter Tea