[1239] Failure to Transcend

Link to story:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_N1UsQT-RYWB-vodpThOaRNedSkAdaTjtdIxVcWI-E0/edit?usp=sharing

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General feedback I'm looking for:

1-General prose and readability

2-I'm not in love with the title and am open to changing it. Thoughts on the title.

3-I'm not sure if the theme/message I was going for gets through. I'm not sure if the ending will be confusing or not. I'll be curious to see how the story is interpreted.

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My critiques:

[1375] Death is Innocent:
https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/165hccc/1375_death_is_innocent/?sort=new

[2100] Understanding: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/16a2q74/2100_understanding/