[466] Blade of Roses

Both of my critiques are of similarly short excerpts, so I did two just to be sure. Hopefully that's okay. And still helpful.

First Critique

Second Critique

I wanna say thank you to everybody who read the earlier version and read this one now. Especially if you spare a critique. Y'all are doing wonders

Anyways, here's my story's revised first page.

It's about adventurous, anthropomorphic grave robbers. Which is a bit different from the earlier draft I posted here. As I'm realizing my always-too-big dream projects are all that inspire me, usually. And I've never let my silly ideas take control.

Here's the earlier draft if you're curious.

EDIT: thank you everybody. the varied yet congruent critiques for both drafts has been as telling as any key moment in my writings' lifespan. truly inspiring. thanks again