[1106] Untitled 1st scene from scifi

Hello everyone. I wanted to particularly thank those who reviewed my first submission a couple weeks ago. This is a different piece I am working on. I tried to incorporate the feedback I received, especially about making it clear what was going on, and improving pacing. This is a shorter submission than the prior one, but I would like to see how this one compares to see if it reads better.

I have never done a trigger warning before, but I figure erring on the side of caution just in case - suicide (about to, no follow-through).

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1giJ5cEoqGSNtfAXraLrPeKSrzETiuGPvNYnPtCf0xBw/edit?usp=sharing

All feedback welcome.

My recent critiques:

2260, 354

If more is needed, I would be happy to do so. Have a good night all.