[2265] Bottom of a Wishing Well

I wrote this from a prompt, which was 'there's a spirit at the bottom of a wishing well that wants to help people but is really bad at it'.

I'm happy with the story for the most part, and I want to share it with friends and save it for a horror collection I'm working on. But I believe there are some problems. I have a general idea what's wrong with it, but I'm too close to see exactly what needs changing. To sum up my concerns, I think it may be too short, not have enough wish examples, loses the premise of no one knowing what they want, and has a rushed ending with too severe of a tonal switch. So are these issues? And are there other problems I am not seeing? Any advice to improve the story?

Here's the feedback I gave to others. Keep in mind I did a lot of editing and commenting in their documents. I know I am lacking in structure and am poor at giving feedback on themes and emotions. I probably can't fix that second issue, as it's a me-thing, but I plan on using more structure in the future. :)

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I hope that's enough.

Here's the story. Trigger warnings: Murder and Death, Death of an Infant,

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Thank you in advance for any comments, feedback, and edits! I appreciate it a lot! :)