[653] Untitled - (Dystopian, horror, sci-fi? maybe all?)

Sorry about the lack of a title, never been good at naming things, but definitely tell me your ideas!

Just a short story I wrote. I've never written anything creative outside of school (even in school I've only gotten like 3 creative writing assignments, it's depressing), but please, give me brutally honest criticisms, nonetheless!

FYI, it takes place on a battlefield, so all the trigger warnings one might associate with that.

Link to story:

What I'm curious about specifically (but also just tell me everything you want to) is:

- What do you think a good title might be?

- Do you understand what is happening? Especially the whole fear/courage thing?

- Is wraiths/spirits a confusing terminology?

- Does it need to be longer?

- Maybe this goes without saying, but did you like it, why or why not?

Previous criticism [812]:

Thanks! Hope you enjoy it, I look forward to writing more and improving!

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