[1378] Snoop (Chapter 1, Section 2)

Hello again! Thanks in advance for critiques of Section 2 of this story that still doesn't have a good title.

It's the second part of the first chapter, and takes place directly after part 1 Section 1 isn't directly needed for context, but some things may seem odd without reading the two pieces as part of a whole.

As before, I'm open to any and all feedback. I'm directly concerned with a few things:

• Does it feel like an infodump? It felt like a natural place to introduce the city as where the whole story will take place, but I fear it just came off with me dumping description on the reader.
• Is it paced well? and/or Should this be pulled into it's own chapter? I'm afraid of slowing things down too much still in the first chapter. After editing through it, it starts to feel like it should be its own chapter, but I'm on the fence.
• Does it end too abruptly? I feel this one just sort of... ends, but I can't put my finger on why.
• And finally, if you read part 1 as well, would you keep reading to chapter 2?

Crit for payment: [1539] Born in Fog