[2150] Title TBD Fantasy Web-Novel
Hello,
this is the first part of the first chapter of a web novel I am writing. The chapter is shortened this way to as I am dipping my toes in this subreddit.
The genre is fantasy, it mixes elements of intrusion fantasy and progression fantasy. It is written with some more serious themes in mind and my aim is novel-length story. It includes some minor LGBTQ-Themes as well. Overall I have written 6 chapters and an interlude so far. If this submission goes through I plan on putting the remainder of the chapter (~1000 more words) online in a few days.
All feedback is of course welcome, overall I'm especially interested if this part works well as the beginning of the story.
Is there character introduced somewhat? Is the character likeable/relatable?
Assuming the chapter doesn't end here is it overall written well enough to warrant a read (tastes differ of course)?
My critiques are:
Posted Mar 26, 2024, 1:57 PM UTC