[1807] Halcyon Days

A scene requires words to be put down on paper, and I kinda hate putting words down. I rush and gloss and skip and it ends up being a mess of unclear garbage, when it isn't just the regular garbage kind.

Tell me what's unclear, what doesn't work, and how much it pisses you off I used the word petrichor—it pisses me off too so don't worry.

I would really like the first chapter to Hit with a capital H and I also know the first sentence isn't an attention grabber. That's okay. I'm fine with being unreasonable.

But the real question is: would you keep reading?

Link to doc:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tcSiQcs7JBD7tM5yT2VxhLfYYArX2Bd9k72inPb4VMk/edit?usp=drivesdk

Recent critique:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1br32gg/1978_homunculus/kxcwx29/