[2260] The Shadowed Heart - prologue

Hi! I'm looking for feedback on your general impression of my dark ya fantasy novel. This is the first book in the series.

I need opinions and suggestions on my hook, stuff I could fix. This opening scene is a family murder that is supposed to kick off the series. What feels right? What seems off or lame? What kept your reading/made you want to stop reading?

This is just part 1 of the prologue. Abiding by the sub's rules, I'll post the rest of the prologue 2 days from now along with a recap.

Link to the doc.

Tw: violence, family murder, descriptions of dead bodies

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