[2345] Valistry - Chapter 1 (2nd Attempt)

When I first submitted my chapter, I received good feedback about how I should slow down and only include what’s necessary. To introduce my story and world through my character without clogging it with detail I didn’t need. I’m hoping that’s what I did this time around.

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Crit 1 [2691] (https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1b7r3bl/2691_a_portal_fantasy_chapter_3/ku4aafy/)

Crit 2 [1236] (https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1b5uosn/1236_green_sky_latitude_first_half_of_chapter_1/kual2ps/)