[721] Opening paragraphs of a portal fantasy story.

This is one of those stories where a guy from our world gets transported to a fantasy setting. I attempted to cut right to the chase, and my only goal here is to hook the readers. If I failed at that and lost your interest, please let me know where you stopped reading and why.

This is not the full first chapter, just the opening paragraphs.

Story:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1L93L-lEth8S4bhBtAk4-gP3-NC6fszmg59r50u7S\_BE/edit?usp=sharing

Critique:

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Thanks for the feedback!