[690] One Less Loose End

This is my first time submitting a story to this subreddit. I chose a short story, simply because this is my first time writing with dialogue, most of my other work is largely descriptive.

I started this story in the action so there's I tried to have less exposition in the start, although I hope the plot makes more sense in the end. Please tell me if it doesn't.

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Previous critique: 721 Word Story

Any feedback is appreciated