[586] Heavy Breath

Hello everyone this is my first time writing for the internet to see. I would prefer a blind read and then have you answer my questions. Questions: >!Please do let me know your thoughts on the quality of writing and if the characters actions and what they do/observe hold any meaning as to what they are currently feeling, or if everything comes off as too vague and just seems like some guy doing boring things.!<

Thanks for your time

[My Story](https://docs.google.com/document/d/1swX1v28GmYaiQN39Vkaf87Tr-HYByzad-iPKs3D8pUQ/edit?usp=sharing)

[Critique](https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1c9p9aa/comment/l1o341f/?utm\_source=share&utm\_medium=web3x&utm\_name=web3xcss&utm\_term=1&utm\_content=share\_button) [690]