[1770] A Rock Like Any Other

Hi everyone,

Submitting for the first time (i've left detailed feedback already, and on something with a larger wordcount) - it's become clear to me that I need some candid feedback, so please don't hold back. Keen to hear any and everything that jars, doesn't work, or is just plain bad writing(seriously, if there are common grammar issues please tell me!).

I really want to improve, so let me have it.

Google Doc My Crits: 1

I've marked this as fantasy, which I guess it kind of is, as it's a present day island without access to modern media etc. I loved this idea when it came to me and now I feel like the story has just fallen flat.