[1447] Sophron - 2

Hey all,

I’m fiddling with beginnings.

What all’s wrong with this one?

After reading, if you wish:

!Yes, I’m literally fridging someone here. I kinda want something backgroundy and ominous in that spot, but maybe I just need to cut flashing back and make the present scene stronger. Whaddayathink?!<

Thanks!

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