The Dawn of Dusk and Soul Shadows

This is my first try at writing poetry and it resulted from being lovestruck with a wonderful girl, that unfortunaly i feel will not get further, reason why i did this hahahahahha. Please don't doubt to give me any kind of feedback!

1. The Dawn of Dusk

My sun, a distant ember, burns in faraway lands,
Leaving me a a barren wasteland in her absence.
The stars,like scattered diamonds, mimic her brilliance,
But their light pales before the sunbeam of her smile.
She embodies a beauty beyond compare,
A luminous mystery that trascends words.
Though distance separate us, an unyielding chasm,
Your memory, a beacon, forever in my grasp.
While my own feelings may fade like a dying star,
This farewell whispers the truth i hold dear:
My love for you, a boundless flame, burns ever bright
May fortune guide you in life's winding path.
With fervent hope, i pray for your endless joy,
A hapiness so vast, it spills over the brim.
This lonely letter, a testament of my devotion,
Sails across the heavens, whispering your name.

2. Soul Shadows

Thoughts, fleeting shadows in the day's swift flight,
Yet your memory burns, a persistent light.
You question the allure, the magic i find,
A universe of reasons, boundless and kind.
Fear grips my heart as night descends, alone,
For in your essence, a piece of me is grown.
Though moments shared were fleeting, feelings endure,
Love's question lingers, a mystery pure.
In silent prayers, a truth begins to unfold,
A love so profound, its story yet untold.
Safe passage, my star, on life's winding way,
May fortune and joy brighten your every day.

Yours truly my dear Ana, Heraguer.

My comments:

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