[1288] Our Lives Backstage (Start of Chapter 1)

This is around a quarter of the first chapter of a lesbian romance/magical realism coming of age story (you call it coming of age when most of the characters will be early 20's right?). I have the entire thing planned out, a few chapters written, and intend for it to be around 80-90 thousand words. I haven't really written anything seriously before so am looking for any feedback whatsoever, but most of all:

1. Does this work as a good hook/intro to the story? ie. Are you interested in reading more?

2. Thoughts on the prose/quality of writing?

3. Thoughts on the main character and her internal narration/monologue? (though there's not much to go off of yet)

Google doc link:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ag6wWowHJPKDhcnN8KHokolvrOQ0DKLoG-wVXTo16JM/edit?usp=sharing

Critique: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1eyl9uc/comment/ljh87e4/