[1306] Genesis and Exodus, part 2

Hi all,

This is part 2 of Genesis and Exodus, a mid way chapter in the novel I'm currently revising.

My work: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1CHHqm-ubRo4-WH1bb-tVr_RNImBwIzk-5UTzqfWEyko/edit?usp=sharing

All feedback is welcome, harsh critiques don't offend me. So feel free to let me have it. I won't learn anything otherwise. Thanks in advance.

Critique: https://old.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1f66r5o/1711_incompetent_ellie/ll7vyf2/