[1114] Jake and Rachel First Kiss Excerpt

My excerpt: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1eYGpTDXatlARNaqCjk3yyhJ-GIj9CWLXbNtgVNRF88E/edit?tab=t.0

This is an excerpt from a clean romance story I'm writing. This is my first foray into sharing my writing, and I'm just looking to get a general sense of where I am at in my writing, and what works and doesn't work.

Critique: https://old.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1fzq8yh/1542_gingerbread_part_2/lrtur75/