[522] Mint Cartel

Hey everybody, thanks for checking out this post. I'm just looking for honest feedback and whatever you think of this story - anything is appreciated. Please let me know if its a bore or if you actually liked it, and what I could do better. Thanks!

Link - https://docs.google.com/document/d/1uvSi2fMhsTCkNQ0MRNVb5jlMJAqfR4IGFpMmCQr-4cM/edit?tab=t.0

Critique - https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1g37wil/1114_jake_and_rachel_first_kiss_excerpt/