[1776] Second Chance

Hello! This is my first time posting here, I am working on my story and I wanted to know right off the bat if i'm heading in the right direction/establishing the right mood with my prologue. I'm used to write small snippets here and there but less so at actually setting scenes with descriptions and character monologues.

Here is the link to my doc:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pGpBrEZ0STFoLBno22AMqh_KunNX1pDeadt8R9qCqQw/edit?usp=sharing

Previous Critiques:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1i03b4y/comment/m8ml2z6/